Writing Task 1: The Basics
Step 5: Rewrite the story from Step 4, but add 2-3 connectors that you have never used before.
(See the "Chart of Connecting Words" on p 14 in the BASICs Handout.)
All of these connectors are in our textbooks, so if you are not sure how to use them, then look them up!
Title:The Love Story
Nice work No Names! You really did a great job connecting your ideas and adding adjectives and adverbs to make the story interesting. I'll talk to you more about it on Monday----Good Job!
The main character is Micky.He is a handsome man,and he has many bosom friends.He is not only a famous star, but also he is a PSU student.He lives in Portland that is one of the best city for people living. One day, in the moning, the sun is shining brightly. Before he went to class, he wanted to buy a cup of coffee. The line was very long. When he recognized that he forgot to take his wallet, a girl who looks very pure helped him to buy a coffee together. He thanked for her, and they walked togather. They talked with each other,so they found some same hobbies. Like swimming, climbing, and playing computer games. When they had to go to different class,Micky asked the girl's phone number.The girl gave her phone number to Micky kindly, and she told him that she was glad to meet him.Micky like this girl, and he was happy to met her.Also, they like each other and they like to be friends. Since Micky met her, he often has giggled. His friends thought maybe he fell in love.
Afrer that day, he asked her to go out and play together. The girl didn't refuse, so they had unforgettable day. At the end of the day, Micky took her to go home, and said, " We have a wonderful day, i can't forget it. l like you very much and i think you also like me. I hope you are my girlfriend. Are you agree？You can think about it."
The girl was a little shy, and silently nodded. Micky was very exciting.
They were both student,so they usually studied together. ate together, and play together. They had a period of pleasant time. However, the girl didn't kown Micky was a famous star. She just know Micky sometimes was very busy especially on weekend. He was a good student on Monday to Friday. However,on weekend he became a star, and he needed to do something that makes he more successful. After two weeks, the girl felt Micky has secrets. She was hardly to find Micky, and she thought maybe he had not loved her. Her friend meticulous told her he is a star, and Micky is his school name. She was very angry, for she thought she was deceived by Micky, even though maybe he also had a new girlfriend. When Micky knew that the girl have misunderstood he, he tried to explain to her, but it didn't work. Finally, they broke up quickly.
Step 5: Rewrite the story from Step 4, but add 2-3 connectors that you have never used before.
(See the "Chart of Connecting Words" on p 14 in the BASICs Handout.)
All of these connectors are in our textbooks, so if you are not sure how to use them, then look them up!
Title:The Love Story
Nice work No Names! You really did a great job connecting your ideas and adding adjectives and adverbs to make the story interesting. I'll talk to you more about it on Monday----Good Job!
The main character is Micky.He is a handsome man,and he has many bosom friends.He is not only a famous star, but also he is a PSU student.He lives in Portland that is one of the best city for people living. One day, in the moning, the sun is shining brightly. Before he went to class, he wanted to buy a cup of coffee. The line was very long. When he recognized that he forgot to take his wallet, a girl who looks very pure helped him to buy a coffee together. He thanked for her, and they walked togather. They talked with each other,so they found some same hobbies. Like swimming, climbing, and playing computer games. When they had to go to different class,Micky asked the girl's phone number.The girl gave her phone number to Micky kindly, and she told him that she was glad to meet him.Micky like this girl, and he was happy to met her.Also, they like each other and they like to be friends. Since Micky met her, he often has giggled. His friends thought maybe he fell in love.
Afrer that day, he asked her to go out and play together. The girl didn't refuse, so they had unforgettable day. At the end of the day, Micky took her to go home, and said, " We have a wonderful day, i can't forget it. l like you very much and i think you also like me. I hope you are my girlfriend. Are you agree？You can think about it."
The girl was a little shy, and silently nodded. Micky was very exciting.
They were both student,so they usually studied together. ate together, and play together. They had a period of pleasant time. However, the girl didn't kown Micky was a famous star. She just know Micky sometimes was very busy especially on weekend. He was a good student on Monday to Friday. However,on weekend he became a star, and he needed to do something that makes he more successful. After two weeks, the girl felt Micky has secrets. She was hardly to find Micky, and she thought maybe he had not loved her. Her friend meticulous told her he is a star, and Micky is his school name. She was very angry, for she thought she was deceived by Micky, even though maybe he also had a new girlfriend. When Micky knew that the girl have misunderstood he, he tried to explain to her, but it didn't work. Finally, they broke up quickly.